Personal Narrative

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My heart is racing a million miles an hour. A rush of adrenaline enters my body as I past my final lap. I imagine myself crossing the line and everyone clapping and cheering “Penelope! Penelope!”
I enter back to reality. 50 metres...20 metres...10 metres.
I can’t believe it...I just won states for my age group! I collapse full of exhaustion as my mum runs up and gives me a huge hug, tears of joy stream from her face. I bursted into tears as my grip around my mum tightened. As everyone surrounding me cheers “Penelope, Penelope, Penelope!”

I have 4 hours of training this morning, Nationals are coming up in 1 month! I shove the rest of my Vegemite toast into my mouth struggling to chew... “Gulp”
Mum throttles the accelerator and we speed off
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I exit the stadium my face is bright red, almost like a fire extinguisher.

1 MONTH LATER...

OMG. I can’t believe it. It’s the day of Nationals. I feel like the butterflies in my stomach have turned into pigeons flying hysterically. It’s a long drive, almost four hours. I put in my earphones and I zone out of the real world and relax.....
I’m woken by my mum opening the car door and I almost fall out! As I enter the stadium, I spot my friends in the distance. I race to them and I all of a sudden feel so much more comfortable.
The commentator yells out “All girls born in 2004 please come to the marshalling area”
The nerves kick in, two times worse then before. As I line up to the start line I turn to my left as a past friend of mine Eva whispers to me,
“Don’t stuff up, Dork.”
I felt like quitting now, but I can’t!
“Ready,
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My legs become weak, they start to tremble. I stumble trying to pick myself up. I fall flat on my face, hurting my chin, twisting my ankle and banging my knee on the concrete.

Next thing I know I was lying on a hospital bed with the smell of antibacterial wipes and orange jelly filling my lungs. My family surrounds me waiting anxiously to find out what I have done.

“Hello I’m Doctor Bradley, Unfortunately I have some bad news to tell you. Your daughter has severely broken her left leg, fractured her chin, and has a hairline fracture along her right knee, meaning she won’t be able to run again for a long time if not..forever” the doctor sadly explains.
My heart sinks.

2 DAYS LATER ...

As I’m lying on the hospital bed I hear a knock on the door. As she walks in I immediately feel a whirl wind of emotions ripping through my body. Anger, betrayal.

“I’m so sorry from the bottom of my heart, if I didn’t say that nasty comment you would’ve won age champion! It’s all my fault,” Eva tells me as she sobs uncontrollably.

In my head I’m furious but I cannot blame it all on her, I must forgive her otherwise she will feel guilty despite it not being all her fault.

“It’s ok Eva, people make mistakes and yours turned out to be serious. I can surely forgive you!” I say smiling sweetly.

1 MONTH LATER

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