Personal Narrative Assessment Notes The narrative “Out in the Open” would benefit from stronger, more concise language. It's vital to be careful with modifying words. Weak modifiers such as, basically, sort of, and mostly, detract from the strength of all genres of writing. Repetition reviled itself multiple times towards the end of the narrative. The adjective “happy” was overused (three times in 50 words). The word “luck” was repeated in two adjacent sentences. This was not a major issue, but it should still be examined. Teaching strategies that address weak modifiers and repetition in a classroom setting include: displaying a model essay or paragraph that demonstrates the offending habit on the smart board and workshoping it with
