Christine told me about her Hawaiian vacation. She felt the temperature in Korea was warmer than Hawaii. Christine described some of the things she had experienced during her trip. For instance, she played in the ocean and watched a Hawaiian luau. Christine said the most impressive thing about the luau was seeing four to five men twirl flaming torches.
Next, Christine proudly announced that she had scored tickets for an upcoming SHINee concert. She was really excited about it! Then, we examined Christine's homework essay. We reviewed each paragraph carefully. WHen it was necessary, I had suggested ways to improve her writing. Some of them are below:
Writing Observations
Do not start your paragraphs with the same phrase (e.g. 'In the book')
Next, Christine proudly announced that she had scored tickets for an upcoming SHINee concert. She was really excited about it! Then, we examined Christine's homework essay. We reviewed each paragraph carefully. WHen it was necessary, I had suggested ways to improve her writing. Some of them are below:
Writing Observations
Do not start your paragraphs with the same phrase (e.g. 'In the book')