You maintain eye contact, talk slowly, and are very clear in your points. You also have a very detailed answer and hit on all the points required in the question. For instance, you have a very good explanation for each professional behavior that thoroughly describes how important you feel it is. For the STAR method section of your answer, however, I would try to add some more details about the actions you took to convince these companies to support your club. How did you reach out to them and what did you have to tell them in order for them to join the parade and donate money? Additionally, I would consider reworking your introduction. Since this is an interview, I would probably eliminate the phrase "but what is the definition of professionalism?" I would just introduce yourself and jump right into the question in a conversational …show more content…
I would, however, recommend that you change the format of those values to make it sound more conversational. Instead of listing them and then going into detail perhaps say “active listening” and explain the reasoning behind it, then introduce the second value and explain it, and the same for the last value. This may help you seem more organic when talking in front of an actual interviewer. Furthermore, I think your story about your view on ethics would resonate greatly with an interviewer, but there are some changes that I think you should implement to make it seem more refined. Some of phrasing such as “But the truth beyond expectation” is slightly awkward and could be changed to make the answer more conversational. Also, creating a club with such an agenda is a very large accomplishment; I think you should expand on the logistics behind the club to show how large of an undertaking it must have been. All in all, your answer is more than adequate, but implementing some of the changes we mentioned will make it