I’ve always felt that school was a choice for me and that it would be the basis that started the rest of my life. My choices were either to push myself and achieve a successful education. Or to waste the last year of my highschool life and take easier classes to ease through the year. I instead chose to challenge myself and take higher level-educated classes. One class of my choice was the Honors English 4 course. It was a big step from what I am use to but I feel that while I have weaknesses I have also obtained strengths of equal amount from taking this class. The grade difference in my second drafts of the Narrative Essay and the Observational Essay were a whole letter grade apart in each criterion. Which shows a considerable increase in
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All I usually changed were the structural errors instead of the grammar errors. In taking this class thus far I have learned that this type of editing will not have me pass at my preferred grade. The evidence of this lies in all both the narrative and observational essay. From “Jeez Grandma!” to “This is Gaming?” my editing in my correctness criterion had improved but only by a small margin. Evidently showing me from the start that I needed to improve and that I can’t be sloppy with my work, or that’ll cost me severely by the end of the semester. Specifically in my correctness errors I have major problems with verb tense shifts and comma placement. A perfect example in my misuse of commas, “Losing my patience at the yelling I throw the comforter away from me, “Shut up already! I know! I know! Can’t you be quiet for once in your life?!” I shout in return.” (“Jeez Grandma!” 1). In this one sentence there are two comma errors alone. One not being present at all after the dependent clause before “I throw…” to connect the sentence all together. This is also a run-on sentence, where I should have separated the dialogue into a new paragraph and away from the story. Writing the narrative essay I realised how little I know about details in writing with dialogue. I had never written a narrative essay before but writing “Jeez Grandma!” taught me a few things about how to properly write …show more content…
To start, if I don’t like the topic I choose for an essay or if I don’t truly understand the essay guidelines then the focus is really affected. By the end with the final copy in an essay the focus is normally more sharpened than the first draft because as I understand the errors I see where I truly went wrong in guiding the focus. After I find where I went wrong I formulate a solution to guide the focus back on track. Reviewing an essay at least a week after writing it will easily reveal how I strayed from the focus. Particularly in ”This is Gaming?” I did an exceptionally well job in keeping my focus steady but I feel that since it was an observational essay it would be somewhat to stray from the focus. It was very specific and detailed to me on how to properly write this essay. There were so many details needed to properly portray that the online gaming community is a discourse community, I feel that it was hard to go wrong on the focus. In the narrative “Jeez Grandma!” I struggled much more. I thought focusing would be much easier than how it actually formed out. For my particular topic, my dysfunctional relationship with my grandmother, seemed to have too many details needed for the readers to genuinely understand the complexity of my situation. So the essay itself seemed more scrambled than I planned. I understand that some of the details would seem “unnecessary” to others but it was
All I usually changed were the structural errors instead of the grammar errors. In taking this class thus far I have learned that this type of editing will not have me pass at my preferred grade. The evidence of this lies in all both the narrative and observational essay. From “Jeez Grandma!” to “This is Gaming?” my editing in my correctness criterion had improved but only by a small margin. Evidently showing me from the start that I needed to improve and that I can’t be sloppy with my work, or that’ll cost me severely by the end of the semester. Specifically in my correctness errors I have major problems with verb tense shifts and comma placement. A perfect example in my misuse of commas, “Losing my patience at the yelling I throw the comforter away from me, “Shut up already! I know! I know! Can’t you be quiet for once in your life?!” I shout in return.” (“Jeez Grandma!” 1). In this one sentence there are two comma errors alone. One not being present at all after the dependent clause before “I throw…” to connect the sentence all together. This is also a run-on sentence, where I should have separated the dialogue into a new paragraph and away from the story. Writing the narrative essay I realised how little I know about details in writing with dialogue. I had never written a narrative essay before but writing “Jeez Grandma!” taught me a few things about how to properly write …show more content…
To start, if I don’t like the topic I choose for an essay or if I don’t truly understand the essay guidelines then the focus is really affected. By the end with the final copy in an essay the focus is normally more sharpened than the first draft because as I understand the errors I see where I truly went wrong in guiding the focus. After I find where I went wrong I formulate a solution to guide the focus back on track. Reviewing an essay at least a week after writing it will easily reveal how I strayed from the focus. Particularly in ”This is Gaming?” I did an exceptionally well job in keeping my focus steady but I feel that since it was an observational essay it would be somewhat to stray from the focus. It was very specific and detailed to me on how to properly write this essay. There were so many details needed to properly portray that the online gaming community is a discourse community, I feel that it was hard to go wrong on the focus. In the narrative “Jeez Grandma!” I struggled much more. I thought focusing would be much easier than how it actually formed out. For my particular topic, my dysfunctional relationship with my grandmother, seemed to have too many details needed for the readers to genuinely understand the complexity of my situation. So the essay itself seemed more scrambled than I planned. I understand that some of the details would seem “unnecessary” to others but it was