Religious Freedom Reflection

Over the course of this class, I have improved my writing and writing communication skills. I have learned how to string sentences together to produce flow, and how to incorporate quotes, information, and sources into my writing. Out of the three papers I wrote this semester, I decided to choose my second essay, A Town Perpetually Lost in its Past, and my third essay, Religious Freedom: Is It Really Free?. I feel that these papers had the necessary foundation to mature with the proper revisions. My second essay, A Town Perpetually Lost in its Past, was hindered by awkward wording and lack of consistency when framing my quotes. In my revision, I sought to address those issues, putting the quotes in an understandable context and fixing any vague …show more content…
It is the culmination of everything I have learned in this class, and it shows. The essay only suffered from grammatical errors, one spelling error, an error in quoting, and one transition that needed to be smoothed. Addressing the grammatical errors and the one spelling error was simple. The confusion in the quotation was an oversight on my part. The first part of the quote was actually a quote from the pizzeria itself, needing double quotations. The second part was the ABC news article referencing the pizzeria as they, instead of using a direct quote. To fix this problem, I broke the quote into two sections, and edited the second quote by replacing “they” with “we”. Since ABC states that this is what the company told them, the words “they” and “we” can be used interchangeably depending on the context it is used in. To smooth the transition in my introduction, I used an extra two sentences to show that there is a controversy on whether this bill should be law or not, and then went on to ask if companies should have the right to discriminate. I believe that this helps smooth the introduction and eloquently leads into the topic of