My Major Strength

In my story, I thought that the major strength was my intro. I really liked how it kept the reader hooked and were wondering what happened and how she got in the situation she was in. I also thought that is was cool that the story started with outcome of the end of the world and how she was all alone and ended with it.
After my first draft I was given feedback to revise on the sensory details with certain things that happened to her so the reader could really feel how she felt. I agreed that that would make the story better. So the part where her mom died, I put way more detail in how she reacted when she found out that her mom died. I also put more sensory details when she was woken up by the sounds of bombs were going off and how she felt and stuff like that. I think that made it so much better, because if kind of brought life/reality to the story. …show more content…
Another thing that's was suggested was that they didn't understand why the U.S. lost all money. I decided not to really put in major details about those parts just because I said in my story that the government said “ No more money!” And I stated that no one knew why. I also didn't go into detail on the era and what it was like during that time like with technology, because the point of my story was about the end of the world and how one girl survived and I didn't think that technology and stuff was very important because it didn't have anything to do with my