My First Paper: A Shadow In The Woods

As I wrote my first paper for this class, A Shadow in the Woods, I found myself to be a bit nervous. I looked down at the notes I had taken and told myself that it was time to apply what I had learned. I knew that I had many things to avoid, such as comma splices, bad word choice and incorrect grammar. When I first received my graded paper, I grew worried because of how many red marks were on it. I was used to my high school teachers using a red pen to mark my mistakes. To my surprise, there was plenty of constructive criticism and compliments on my writing!
For starters, I saw that my MLA format was correct. I had used the template provided on Moodle as a guide. Throughout my prior years of school, I had used MLA format and was quite comfortable …show more content…
Regardless, I can use my other resources such as a thesaurus and any synonym website.
I have been working on my transitions by using the Little Brown Book, the FANBOY and HOTSHOT method. I have found that it makes the paper flow better, and also gives it a more mature and professional sound to it. I did try to use a larger span of vocabulary, such as “diverse,” “deprived,” “conformity,” and “isolated.” Using a broader vocabulary showed me that I do not have to type the way I talk. I am able to put my thoughts down on paper while sounding like an educated college student.
There are many parts of this paper that I am proud of. I created a vivid image of what my childhood was like, including descriptive details such as how my family and I all lived on the same street. I allowed the reader to take a step inside of my shoes, and see what my life as a child was like. I described the hardships that my mother endured, as well as including the help she received from my family. I also think that my paragraphs flowed nicely together, creating a chronological order for the reader to