Paper 1 draft was reviewed by the Professor and a friend of mine; however, the focus of the reviews were drastically different and allowed me two improve my paper in two dimensions. On one hand, the Professor focused on the structure of my argument and the evidences to support my argument. Since the Professor knows the background information well, she was able to suggest improvements in conveying the author’s ideas and exploit weaknesses in my argument. For example, I would never have noticed the weakness of my second point of my argument, trialibility, without the Professor’s explanation of how it does not support my argument well. On the other hand, my friend helped improved sentence structures that allowed me to learn how to express my ideas
