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Memoir submitted is a first person narrative of the appropriate length.
Memoir submitted does not include a first person voice or is excessively long or short.
Content
Memoir includes an in-depth exploration of one moment of growth that is then expanded into a longer writing.
Memoir lists multiple events without a clear sense of how they build on each other. The choice of events detracts from the personal feel.
Voice
Memoir helps us understand and make sense of the author as a person.
Memoir feels sterile, without a personal evocation. In the year of 2009, when I was around 6 years old I traveled to Mexico with my sister, aunt,uncle, and cousins. Both my parents couldn’t go because my little brother had just been born but they wished us the best. It wasn’t your average …show more content…
Finally one day my aunt and uncle told us that we have arrived. We all jumped up and down in excitement. I remember turning on the curb of this street and just seeing all my family just there ready to meet us. As soon as we got out everyone came running towards us asking us all these questions. I think most of the excitement was also because we were from the United States and it was fantasizing to them. I didn’t think much about how different we maybe even though we were family. We stayed in the house of my grandparents on my mom side of the family. Which I called Abuelita, Grandmother and Abuelito, Grandfather. The first few days we just spent time meeting my mom’s side of the family and getting to know them. I meet one of my cousins named Ruth and she was a few years older than me. She had just starting school so Ruth decided to take my sister, my cousin and I to her school. I remember being excited to visit a school in Mexico and seeing what it was like. Ruth went to a Secundaria, which means middle school in spanish, and it was an interesting
Not met
Form
Memoir submitted is a first person narrative of the appropriate length.
Memoir submitted does not include a first person voice or is excessively long or short.
Content
Memoir includes an in-depth exploration of one moment of growth that is then expanded into a longer writing.
Memoir lists multiple events without a clear sense of how they build on each other. The choice of events detracts from the personal feel.
Voice
Memoir helps us understand and make sense of the author as a person.
Memoir feels sterile, without a personal evocation. In the year of 2009, when I was around 6 years old I traveled to Mexico with my sister, aunt,uncle, and cousins. Both my parents couldn’t go because my little brother had just been born but they wished us the best. It wasn’t your average …show more content…
Finally one day my aunt and uncle told us that we have arrived. We all jumped up and down in excitement. I remember turning on the curb of this street and just seeing all my family just there ready to meet us. As soon as we got out everyone came running towards us asking us all these questions. I think most of the excitement was also because we were from the United States and it was fantasizing to them. I didn’t think much about how different we maybe even though we were family. We stayed in the house of my grandparents on my mom side of the family. Which I called Abuelita, Grandmother and Abuelito, Grandfather. The first few days we just spent time meeting my mom’s side of the family and getting to know them. I meet one of my cousins named Ruth and she was a few years older than me. She had just starting school so Ruth decided to take my sister, my cousin and I to her school. I remember being excited to visit a school in Mexico and seeing what it was like. Ruth went to a Secundaria, which means middle school in spanish, and it was an interesting