I have always thought of myself as a strong writer. My highest grades have always been in writing classes and it is for that reason that I am pursuing law (one of the most writing intensive professions imaginable). This semester my goals were not to improve the mechanics of my writing, I wanted to improve the theoretical aspect. with proof reading software, a monkey can write a sentence, I want to be able to write an argument. And I do believe that I have improved.
This semester I set the challenge for myself to practice my research. And I think I might have swamped myself in doing so. My essay was not my best work, however I tried writing in a different style than I am used to. I wholeheartedly believe that if I were to rewrite my essay again I could apply what I learned to vastly improve it.
The number one mistake I made, or at least believe I made, was narrative flow. I had a view of how I wanted my argument to flow: len Bias’s death -> moral panic -> mandatory minimums -> larger …show more content…
Most everything I know I learned studying for this essay. To look at one thing in particular that I learned, in the essay I wrote about how the prison system imposed mandatory minimums as a way of maintaining a slave class. Mandatory minimums increase prison numbers and are unequally targeted towards minorities. The prison system then works their prisoners for as little as $0.17 an hour in some cases. However, through further study I discovered that this system was in fact caused by mandatory minimums and not the cause of them. Prison labor was a way for prisons to increase funding so that they could keep up with increased populations. There exist scholarly peer reviewed journals that argue that the prison system is the continuation of a slave class. However, there are far more than argue the reverse. Still, I found the idea to be an interesting one, so I decided to include it and form it into one of my
This semester I set the challenge for myself to practice my research. And I think I might have swamped myself in doing so. My essay was not my best work, however I tried writing in a different style than I am used to. I wholeheartedly believe that if I were to rewrite my essay again I could apply what I learned to vastly improve it.
The number one mistake I made, or at least believe I made, was narrative flow. I had a view of how I wanted my argument to flow: len Bias’s death -> moral panic -> mandatory minimums -> larger …show more content…
Most everything I know I learned studying for this essay. To look at one thing in particular that I learned, in the essay I wrote about how the prison system imposed mandatory minimums as a way of maintaining a slave class. Mandatory minimums increase prison numbers and are unequally targeted towards minorities. The prison system then works their prisoners for as little as $0.17 an hour in some cases. However, through further study I discovered that this system was in fact caused by mandatory minimums and not the cause of them. Prison labor was a way for prisons to increase funding so that they could keep up with increased populations. There exist scholarly peer reviewed journals that argue that the prison system is the continuation of a slave class. However, there are far more than argue the reverse. Still, I found the idea to be an interesting one, so I decided to include it and form it into one of my