Macbeth Appearance Vs Reality Analysis

In order to improve my claim, I reworded it and changed my argument. In my original paper, my claim was, “In William Shakespeare’s tragedy Macbeth, the confusion between appearance and reality demonstrates Macbeth's decline from a thoughtful man, to one awash with guilt and insanity, an finally to a naive man.” According to the rubric, claims are “clear”. My claim was not clear because I listed all the ways Macbeth changed. By listing every personality trait, it was hard to decipher what it was truly arguing. Additionally, the list was not parallel, making it even less clear. To fix these issues, i changed my claim to “the confusion of appearance versus reality demonstrates Macbeth’s downfall.” This claim is more supportable, as the essay …show more content…
In order to change my support, I tied everything back to my thesis and used supportable and correct evidence. In my original paper, my first point was that Macbeth could manipulate appearance, in comparison to Malcolm. In the play, Macbeth doesn’t control appearance versus reality, Lady Macbeth does and all the conversation between Duncan and Macbeth shows is that Duncan cannot avoid confusion between appearance and reality. To fix this, I just cut the whole analysis. In that same paragraph, I discussed the blood imagery in Macbeth’s hallucination of the dagger. One of the comments on turnitin said that i was not “analyzing blood imagery”... and that i needed “to tie everything back to appearance and reality”. To fix this, I explained how blood imagery had changed through the play, from representing honor, to evil. Furthermore, I explained how the blood, representing evil, appearing, represented Macbeth’s decline after losing morals. I also used the phrase “shows that he is in control”, but I didn’t actually prove this statement. I ended up cutting the entire phrase to avoid the lack of support. In my second paragraph, I analyzed the hallucination of Banquo. My analysis focused on how the hallucination shows that he