With Jamie's permission, the essay is copied below. The essay is outstanding, with strong organization and especially effective support and development of ideas. Jamie uses a sophisticated writing voice and demonstrates a mastery of English grammar, punctuation, and word-choice.
Notice in particular the support and development of ideas in the body paragraphs and the lengths of the body paragraphs. Each body paragraph is the substantial length of about 300 words and is well focused on the development of one main idea.
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The woman, Miss Brill, enjoys her habitual outing to hear the band play and soak in the atmosphere, but most of all she relishes the chance to sit in on the lives of others by listening and watching. Mansfield's "Miss Brill" illustrates the old woman's attempt to alleviate loneliness by creating an alternate reality for herself, yet she is ultimately forced to face the self-deception for what it truly