“It’s just like painting a picture.” These 6 words by themselves may have no significance; however, when put together they can mean anything. These 6 words had a great impact on me. At first, a fog covered these words, and I was unaware of the weight that this sentence carried. However, one day this fog was lifted and I was finally able to uncover the concealed meaning behind these inspirational words.
My mom was always willing to help me; even in times of great frustration, she was there. Specifically, I remember one day when I was doing my creative writing journal in 3rd grade, she said to me,”It’s just like painting a picture. Just describe what you see going on outside.” Snottily, I answered her, “It’s snowing. There’s a bird over there.” …show more content…
What color are they? What are they saying?”
“Saying? What the heck do you mean saying?” I said in a bratty tone. Looking back now, I can see that I was clearly being too literal and thinking inside the box, which is another thing my mom said to me often, but that is another essay.
“What I’m saying is, be creative, if the bird could talk what would it be saying.”
Now, you could imagine my frustration since I was such a literal thinker and I didn’t really believe in made up things like other kids. I never thought of things like this; I thought that a bird was a bird and it flew around.
“Uh, I don’t know, maybe there is a lot of snow?”
“Good! That’s better!” my mom said encouragingly. She then proceeded to help me describe all the other things I saw outside. Feeling a sense of accomplishment, I packed my notebook up and put it in my backpack, eager to show my teacher, Mrs. Haas, the next day in …show more content…
I went home that night yearning to see my teacher’s praise for my excellent writing. The next day, Mrs. Haas handed back my journal where a sinister “S” stared into my soul along with a comment: “Writing was better. You can do better. See me!” I was crushed. Feelings of discouragement swept over me. My blood, sweat, and tears went into that journal and all I get from her is, “I think you can do better.” Mrs. Haas told me that I should incorporate similes, metaphors, and personification in my next assignment. She also told me something that still sticks with me today: “show, don’t tell.” Today, I now realize that my writings before this were extremely boring since I merely told my audience what was happening instead of showing them through figurative language and my 5
My mom was always willing to help me; even in times of great frustration, she was there. Specifically, I remember one day when I was doing my creative writing journal in 3rd grade, she said to me,”It’s just like painting a picture. Just describe what you see going on outside.” Snottily, I answered her, “It’s snowing. There’s a bird over there.” …show more content…
What color are they? What are they saying?”
“Saying? What the heck do you mean saying?” I said in a bratty tone. Looking back now, I can see that I was clearly being too literal and thinking inside the box, which is another thing my mom said to me often, but that is another essay.
“What I’m saying is, be creative, if the bird could talk what would it be saying.”
Now, you could imagine my frustration since I was such a literal thinker and I didn’t really believe in made up things like other kids. I never thought of things like this; I thought that a bird was a bird and it flew around.
“Uh, I don’t know, maybe there is a lot of snow?”
“Good! That’s better!” my mom said encouragingly. She then proceeded to help me describe all the other things I saw outside. Feeling a sense of accomplishment, I packed my notebook up and put it in my backpack, eager to show my teacher, Mrs. Haas, the next day in …show more content…
I went home that night yearning to see my teacher’s praise for my excellent writing. The next day, Mrs. Haas handed back my journal where a sinister “S” stared into my soul along with a comment: “Writing was better. You can do better. See me!” I was crushed. Feelings of discouragement swept over me. My blood, sweat, and tears went into that journal and all I get from her is, “I think you can do better.” Mrs. Haas told me that I should incorporate similes, metaphors, and personification in my next assignment. She also told me something that still sticks with me today: “show, don’t tell.” Today, I now realize that my writings before this were extremely boring since I merely told my audience what was happening instead of showing them through figurative language and my 5