CHARACTERS
- In order to really spend time and strengthen character, let's see what a draft looks like with just two Ironclads on the mission. Let's work on their introductions, and allow the characters breathe throughout the movie. What is the conflict between them? What are the issues they need to work out that spring up from seeing each other for the first time after all of these years? Did a woman come between them, but deep down it was something more? Perhaps to help distinguish our characters, we give our Ironclads their each unique, special skill?
- Additionally, we could also try starting the movie with three Ironclads, and killing the Virgil character off at the end of the first act. Perhaps if we take this approach we can include some set up that it Asher is sabotaging the mission and caused his death? By …show more content…
The script should read heavier instead of lighter. The irreverence and charm will come eventually, but that should be the final step at a later date. We first need to make sure the draft is in good condition first.
STAKES
- Simply put, our stakes need work. Working on characters and tone will definitely help, but let's layout what power Odin has in the opening of our movie. The stakes should certainly be felt on a worldwide scope, but we also need to ensure that there are personal stakes for our Ironclad characters. Shaw's daughter isn't utilized and can help with stakes. Perhaps there's a ticking clock we can strengthen as well? What's on the line?
- Additionally, does it currently feel like Pauling is going after the bad guy, and our Ironclad guys are simply trying to put a bandaid on the issue? The third act is really where the movie's stakes become clear. Let's find a way to get to this rescue mission faster, and work in more time with the Ironclads v. Odin.
LOGIC
- Let's shore up the logic throughout the movie by having clear answers to the following
- In order to really spend time and strengthen character, let's see what a draft looks like with just two Ironclads on the mission. Let's work on their introductions, and allow the characters breathe throughout the movie. What is the conflict between them? What are the issues they need to work out that spring up from seeing each other for the first time after all of these years? Did a woman come between them, but deep down it was something more? Perhaps to help distinguish our characters, we give our Ironclads their each unique, special skill?
- Additionally, we could also try starting the movie with three Ironclads, and killing the Virgil character off at the end of the first act. Perhaps if we take this approach we can include some set up that it Asher is sabotaging the mission and caused his death? By …show more content…
The script should read heavier instead of lighter. The irreverence and charm will come eventually, but that should be the final step at a later date. We first need to make sure the draft is in good condition first.
STAKES
- Simply put, our stakes need work. Working on characters and tone will definitely help, but let's layout what power Odin has in the opening of our movie. The stakes should certainly be felt on a worldwide scope, but we also need to ensure that there are personal stakes for our Ironclad characters. Shaw's daughter isn't utilized and can help with stakes. Perhaps there's a ticking clock we can strengthen as well? What's on the line?
- Additionally, does it currently feel like Pauling is going after the bad guy, and our Ironclad guys are simply trying to put a bandaid on the issue? The third act is really where the movie's stakes become clear. Let's find a way to get to this rescue mission faster, and work in more time with the Ironclads v. Odin.
LOGIC
- Let's shore up the logic throughout the movie by having clear answers to the following