Importance Of Neurobiology, Physiology And Behavior At UC Davis

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While fulfilling my major requirements of Neurobiology, Physiology, and Behavior at UC Davis I did not have to take many writing composition courses and neither did I have the time. Now as I am applying to medical schools I see the importance of my essays on the interviewer and the whole application process, and now I realize how beneficial writing classes would have been. The skills I have learned in this class will help me make my essays more influential and appealing. Once summer break starts I will take out a few days to rewrite my personal statements using the new techniques I have learned. Throughout this course I have gained many skills such as coherence, cohesion, paragraph structure, etc. In my view the most beneficial skills I have …show more content…
The thesis in my proposal paper gives the reader a better understanding about the paper than did the thesis of my first analytical paper. For example, in the first analytical essay I wrote, “This discovery of my experience led me to same assertion as Pamuk’s in “Huzun” that a place cannot be understood the same way by locals and visitors.” As you can see in this thesis neither is my argument really persuasive nor is my viewpoint really clear. However in my proposal I wrote “Even though gene therapy has existed for a while, its acceptance has been slow regardless of the fact that this therapy is helpful in curing terminal diseases like cancer” which is a much more clear and concise thesis …show more content…
I have learned how to write better analytical papers. This is important especially when you are writing about different texts otherwise your paper does not remain your own it is overtaken by all the quotes you have used. For example in my first analytical rough draft I basically wrote down a list of events that happened to me and my tourist friend, such as while talking about the music playing in the complex I wrote, “As we were walking down the pathway he was enjoying the traditional music being played over the entire complex, despite the fact that he didn’t understand a single word. He was just enjoying the sound of the different classical instruments being played. Whereas when I listened to the music I understood its meaning and was going deeper into a spiritual experience.” After talking to you about this essay I learned how to properly analyze evidence supporting my thesis thus I changed my original analysis to include, “Whereas when I listened to the music I understood its meaning and I felt divinely touched and I never felt more connected to God than at this moment. As you can see my knowledge of the temple and its significance in my religion caused me to make a greater connection with this place similarly, to how a person feels a connection to his or her hometown.” Changing this sentence allowed my essay to be more analytical, and the reader was able to see my viewpoint and my reasoning for why everything was

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