Japanese Sentences That Make Me Wrong

Ever since I had the task to redo a sentence with the “- WORD-,” I been trying to use it but I guess I’m not sure when to use it in my writing. The thing is I am not privileged when it comes to grammar. I actually like to write but I wasn’t good at it. This came to my surprise freshmen year in WR 121. That class is taught by SATAN. At times when I write, I like to use these “...” I feel Japanese. I say that just because some japanese sentences they leave off as, “But…” I envy everyone who figured it out who put a comma in the right place who put the comma splice in the most perfect spot it made their sentence amazing.
I write how I speak… and I just don’t speak like everyone else. I really could care less how I talk but if I could write well it would make all …show more content…
Wrong. Why?

I was a fine cry that the girl made. I’ll tell her “things are gonna get worse sweetheart,” and if they don’t now, then I pray they soon will for her. I understand that I shouldn’t feel like we live in a society where everyone gets a medal… but I’m not asking for a medal. It was a fine cry the bitch made.

I see people writing novels. Writing these eloquent words. Writing these sentences only meant for theses. I am not doing that kind of writing (well barely). These sentences are ones that I would say if I were drunk.
The question is if nominalization is something that is truly important? You know what, I hate nominalizations. I just don’t care. If I were to compare it to Game of Thrones I would say, “I wouldn’t care if this sentence were to die.” I may do an “awwww.”

“Delete little to or nothing words.” Okay I got that. “Delete words that repeat the meaning of other words.” Okay sure… “Delete words that implied other words…” umm… yea… and when I do this all that I’m left with is a bunch of blubber. Why am I left with blubber? The sentence now doesn’t make sense. Now it seems to take away my own style, how I truly sound.

I don’t understand how to revise