A sexually uptight TV host, who has never had an orgasm, embarks on a sexual odyssey to experience her first one, but her obsession jeopardizes her engagement.
STORY COMMENTS
FINDING HER O presents as a raunchy, romantic comedy with an organically funny premise with the idea of the protagonist going in search of her first orgasm. It’s a fun concept. It’s also refreshing to have a female protagonist drive the plot and, in addition, it nice to see a script that focuses on the sexual dysfunction of the central female character rather than on the male counterpart. The topic should resonate with both the female and male adult audience.
While Izzy’s goal is to have an orgasm, her inner goal is more about learning to respect herself, empower …show more content…
As mentioned, repeating nasty woman/women and empowering etc. is verbalized so many times that it diminishes its humor. Granted, humor is subjective to the audience. Raunchy comedies are marketable, but be careful of forcing the humor. The comedy must have good timing and be delivered well, but don’t focus just on gags and jokes.
The best humor is visual and physical with witty one liners, but don’t over try to make some of the raunchy remarks funny, because they tend to feel forced versus natural.
Consider making Harry the type of boyfriend, who is trying to please her, but until she let’s go of her control, there’s nothing he can do. His backstory isn’t needed about being abused because it would have to be more developed and it’s dark. He’s funny (and endearing) when he listens to the show and talks out loud, or when he talks to his own penis.
Zane is presented as being a bit too immature and dysfunctional making him feel a bit cartoonish. It might work for him to be established as the guru of sex, only for them to discover at the end that he has a sexual dysfunction.
Kat and Izzy’s parents are fun and generate nice comedy. Free spirit Kat complements uptight Izzy. Kat also creates good
STORY COMMENTS
FINDING HER O presents as a raunchy, romantic comedy with an organically funny premise with the idea of the protagonist going in search of her first orgasm. It’s a fun concept. It’s also refreshing to have a female protagonist drive the plot and, in addition, it nice to see a script that focuses on the sexual dysfunction of the central female character rather than on the male counterpart. The topic should resonate with both the female and male adult audience.
While Izzy’s goal is to have an orgasm, her inner goal is more about learning to respect herself, empower …show more content…
As mentioned, repeating nasty woman/women and empowering etc. is verbalized so many times that it diminishes its humor. Granted, humor is subjective to the audience. Raunchy comedies are marketable, but be careful of forcing the humor. The comedy must have good timing and be delivered well, but don’t focus just on gags and jokes.
The best humor is visual and physical with witty one liners, but don’t over try to make some of the raunchy remarks funny, because they tend to feel forced versus natural.
Consider making Harry the type of boyfriend, who is trying to please her, but until she let’s go of her control, there’s nothing he can do. His backstory isn’t needed about being abused because it would have to be more developed and it’s dark. He’s funny (and endearing) when he listens to the show and talks out loud, or when he talks to his own penis.
Zane is presented as being a bit too immature and dysfunctional making him feel a bit cartoonish. It might work for him to be established as the guru of sex, only for them to discover at the end that he has a sexual dysfunction.
Kat and Izzy’s parents are fun and generate nice comedy. Free spirit Kat complements uptight Izzy. Kat also creates good