A young woman reluctantly becomes the official companion to a man she hates: he’s the richest man on the planet known as the Human Falcon or Ubermensch, whose responsibility is to save the world.
BRIEF SYNOPSIS:
LITA LONSUN (20’s) becomes the official companion to the richest man on the planet. He’s been called many names including the Atomic Warrior, the Human Falcon, Ogun, and Ubermensch. Lita and the MAN have a mutual contempt and distrust for each other.
PETER GRAY (50’s) escorts her through the palace. He reminds her that for the next year she will have freedom of the palace, but she can’t leave. As the official companion she will accompany her companion to all formal events, sit in morning briefings, dine with him, and basically …show more content…
She opens a drawer and at the very bottom she finds a single vial of Green Liquid.
WHAT WORKS / WHAT DOESN'T / SUGGESTIONS
UBERMENSCH is a very intriguing fantasy script. The script presents with compelling moral choices and tension. It’s presented as a short, but it works more effectively as part of a feature film.
The script features intriguing and complex characters that are forced to make split decision life choices. It’s a high-stakes world with a lot at risk. The presentation conveys strong intensity. There are themes about making choices for the greater good and the consequences that come with those decisions.
While the script contains plenty of strengths, there certainly is also room for more development. The main concern has to do with lack of clarity and not always feeling like one has a firm understanding of exactly what’s going on.
The series of events feel a bit vague. It’s not clear where the story takes place or what year it is. The audience feels a bit disoriented.
First, the opening with the screaming crowd and people chanting Lita’s name doesn’t feel engaging and it doesn’t hook the audience. One has to wonder why they are so excited about her entering the palace. It’s not clear
BRIEF SYNOPSIS:
LITA LONSUN (20’s) becomes the official companion to the richest man on the planet. He’s been called many names including the Atomic Warrior, the Human Falcon, Ogun, and Ubermensch. Lita and the MAN have a mutual contempt and distrust for each other.
PETER GRAY (50’s) escorts her through the palace. He reminds her that for the next year she will have freedom of the palace, but she can’t leave. As the official companion she will accompany her companion to all formal events, sit in morning briefings, dine with him, and basically …show more content…
She opens a drawer and at the very bottom she finds a single vial of Green Liquid.
WHAT WORKS / WHAT DOESN'T / SUGGESTIONS
UBERMENSCH is a very intriguing fantasy script. The script presents with compelling moral choices and tension. It’s presented as a short, but it works more effectively as part of a feature film.
The script features intriguing and complex characters that are forced to make split decision life choices. It’s a high-stakes world with a lot at risk. The presentation conveys strong intensity. There are themes about making choices for the greater good and the consequences that come with those decisions.
While the script contains plenty of strengths, there certainly is also room for more development. The main concern has to do with lack of clarity and not always feeling like one has a firm understanding of exactly what’s going on.
The series of events feel a bit vague. It’s not clear where the story takes place or what year it is. The audience feels a bit disoriented.
First, the opening with the screaming crowd and people chanting Lita’s name doesn’t feel engaging and it doesn’t hook the audience. One has to wonder why they are so excited about her entering the palace. It’s not clear