Hi, Christopher! I really like what you have for your outline so far. Your thesis statement is clearly stated within your introduction, and you seem to make some really good points about how video games can positively effect society. I also like that within all of your main points, you provided a source as well as a description and reasoning as to why you would use that source. You seem to be moving along the right track! Some suggestions I may make to you would be about organization. For example, your thesis could be more effective if it were organized differently in terms of breaking up the sentence a bit, because it is verging on to being a run-on sentence. Instead of "Video games do not negatively affect society but actually improve it
