Hi Si: Is He A Magical Dog?

Hi Si,

I really like you use of imagery especially with the similes and metaphors. This one this my favorite: “She liked to crumble my shirt, chewing it like a dog chewed slippers, smudging it with her lip prints, or simply squeezing it the way you squeeze a wet towel. ” I also appreciate your use of magical realism. Somehow the first scene really didn’t make me expect any magical realism. It was a surprise and I like it. I really want to know more about Eggyolk. Is he a magical dog? or is the man magical himself? Does his mom knows about his birthmark changing?

For some reason I knew when you switch scenes, from past to present without any indication. This is a good thing I think, but just need to be careful in the future. Normally people would use a line to indicate a change of time or a bigger space between the paragraphs. You didn’t have this, but I understood your story. I think its because you included Mia’s name which brings us back to the present. However, sometimes I wonder if the character is thinking about his past and his old dog or is the narrator going back in time like a flashback? …show more content…
Is this a normal thing in the setting? Where is this all set? Is it a magical world? Is all this real? or he is just imagining it all alone.

I think the theme of this story is related to events that scar you for life or unforgettable events. I am not sure if the birthmark is real but I think it represents the important events and something that sticks with you