Hello Yi-Ling, your RIP draft is strong because you have a clear definition of cool, and supportive evidences. More importantly, you are using the rhetorical appeals to convince your audience that going to the theatre is cool. However, your essay would be better if you could focus on how your evidences are used to persuade your audience for you project. You tend to focus more on analyzing your topic, and not your project. It is great that you mentioned specific terms that relate to theatre, but keep in mind that your audience is not an expert in theatre. Therefore, you should explain the terms that are directly related to theatre, such as “rendering the stage”. Some of your sentences are confusing because I did not understand the phrases such
