Provide videos for this project can increase the possibility of making it more academic; instead of, “Oh, free diving is cool” (Fei). In addition, free diving has its risks when I search the videos online. This is an issue Fei needs to tend on, because he is trying to convince people about this sport. Therefore, how to achieve this sport by decreasing the possibility of danger may become an argument to discuss. In his proposal, he used “mediative” couple times such as mediative experience and aspects. It is hard for the readers to fathom the meaning of it when it comes to an unfamiliar topic. Sports often have their positive and negative sides on people so, from Fei’s essay, he explains the psychological and physical aspects free diving brings to humans. Additionally, provide personal experience to make interactions with the audience by gathering their attentions and interests. Lastly, according to the proposal, free diving provides positive impact on people but how can Fei leaves a message behind this research is something he can works on
Provide videos for this project can increase the possibility of making it more academic; instead of, “Oh, free diving is cool” (Fei). In addition, free diving has its risks when I search the videos online. This is an issue Fei needs to tend on, because he is trying to convince people about this sport. Therefore, how to achieve this sport by decreasing the possibility of danger may become an argument to discuss. In his proposal, he used “mediative” couple times such as mediative experience and aspects. It is hard for the readers to fathom the meaning of it when it comes to an unfamiliar topic. Sports often have their positive and negative sides on people so, from Fei’s essay, he explains the psychological and physical aspects free diving brings to humans. Additionally, provide personal experience to make interactions with the audience by gathering their attentions and interests. Lastly, according to the proposal, free diving provides positive impact on people but how can Fei leaves a message behind this research is something he can works on