Professor Trujillo,
I am writing in regards to our Final Portfolio and the revisions that I have made to my original draft to prepare it for the portfolio. Between you and my peers I was given a considerable amount of suggestions and I took all of those into account when revising this paper.
To begin, I looked at the feedback you gave me which was small because, as you said, it “needs very little work on [the] portfolio”. There were a couple paragraphs that you marked as needing more analysis and for those paragraphs I reread them, reanalyzed them, and incorporated more information and more analysis to back up the argument or concept that was being discussed. I also fixed one area that was lacking in a strong transition and fixed a few errors
I am writing in regards to our Final Portfolio and the revisions that I have made to my original draft to prepare it for the portfolio. Between you and my peers I was given a considerable amount of suggestions and I took all of those into account when revising this paper.
To begin, I looked at the feedback you gave me which was small because, as you said, it “needs very little work on [the] portfolio”. There were a couple paragraphs that you marked as needing more analysis and for those paragraphs I reread them, reanalyzed them, and incorporated more information and more analysis to back up the argument or concept that was being discussed. I also fixed one area that was lacking in a strong transition and fixed a few errors