Examples Of Peer Review

First I would like to begin my Peer Review with saying that you are doing well developing your ideas and showing how much you care about the environment. I appreciate that you don’t have unrealistic goals to try and achieve. Everything you talk about is very positive and I like the fact you don’t think about doing things not just by yourself but helping include others to make the cause known and the outcome greater. The fact you talk of not only you gaining more education on this matter but teaching others is also pretty awesome.
I like that you think realistically, you say: “We cannot bring back the dead and we cannot make a change in a day.” and this is very true. People think that we can change and fix everything that is wrong in the world and we can’t and you clearly say that so the reader realizes this. I can feel the passion in your words and how important it is to you to get college campuses to recycle more and do for the environment. You show that you weren’t fully aware of all the things you were doing wrong showing that you are human and made mistakes, but now want to correct your wrongdoings. Showing this, …show more content…
I think that you need to do a little proofreading and reviewing. There are some points in your paper where you jump back and forward with past and present tense. This sentence: “I normally do not litter because I despise seeing the site of trash on the ground.” Taking out “normally” sounds a lot better. Having “normally” there makes it imply you litter some on certain occasions which I’m sure you don’t do. Also, this sentence: “When I do see a recycle bin available I put my trash in the correct bin.” can be a little confusing. It sounds like you are putting trash in the recycling bins which is more than likely not the case, replacing the word “trash” with “recyclables” would do you well. Tweaking your grammar and sentence structure will more than likely change the overall grade a whole