Adeena Schwerd
Mrs. Parkoff
English 10.2
November 16, 2017
FOCUS CORRECTION AREAS
An introduction that includes a claim/thesis statement that takes a clear stance on topic chosen (include the three elements: topic, position, reason): 25 points
Note: A claim/thesis has three basic parts: a statement of the topic), a position on that topic and a quick survey of the reason(s) for that position (why you take the position that you do).
Examples (4 in total) from your observations, experiences, or literature read to support your reasons (your examples support the reasons you mention in your thesis statement): 40 points
Analysis of those examples and how they contribute to your argument: 25 points
Conclusion that connects your reasons and examples and gives final thoughts to the reader: 5 points
Appropriate paragraphing: smooth transitions between paragraphs, organization with introduction, body, conclusion, and logical sequence of paragraphs: 5 points
The Care for Citizens
There are many times that the government interferes too much with the lives of their people. Yet in today's society, it is a priority that the government has an interference in our …show more content…
This problem has increased tremendously over the past few years, which is why the government instituted gun laws. Gun laws restrict many citizens from owning or using guns, in the wrong and negative way. Even though it states in the Constitution that all people have right to bear arms, many people have been misusing this right and harming people in a negative way. Yet, some people feel as if the guns are not the issue, rather the people who own the gun or weapon are the issue. The government instituted these gun laws to protect the people from any attacks, or violence
Mrs. Parkoff
English 10.2
November 16, 2017
FOCUS CORRECTION AREAS
An introduction that includes a claim/thesis statement that takes a clear stance on topic chosen (include the three elements: topic, position, reason): 25 points
Note: A claim/thesis has three basic parts: a statement of the topic), a position on that topic and a quick survey of the reason(s) for that position (why you take the position that you do).
Examples (4 in total) from your observations, experiences, or literature read to support your reasons (your examples support the reasons you mention in your thesis statement): 40 points
Analysis of those examples and how they contribute to your argument: 25 points
Conclusion that connects your reasons and examples and gives final thoughts to the reader: 5 points
Appropriate paragraphing: smooth transitions between paragraphs, organization with introduction, body, conclusion, and logical sequence of paragraphs: 5 points
The Care for Citizens
There are many times that the government interferes too much with the lives of their people. Yet in today's society, it is a priority that the government has an interference in our …show more content…
This problem has increased tremendously over the past few years, which is why the government instituted gun laws. Gun laws restrict many citizens from owning or using guns, in the wrong and negative way. Even though it states in the Constitution that all people have right to bear arms, many people have been misusing this right and harming people in a negative way. Yet, some people feel as if the guns are not the issue, rather the people who own the gun or weapon are the issue. The government instituted these gun laws to protect the people from any attacks, or violence