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*Strengths of the essay: Thanh , thank you for submitting your assignment for review. I am Ann B., your writing tutor. First, I want to point out a strength I noted when I read your paper. This sentence in the introduction presents a question and then answers it: College athletes are supposed to be the best of the best on that level, so why do college athletes not get paid? The …show more content…
Thanh, this problem is easy to fix! First, you can list four main points in the thesis statement. There is no rule that you must have just three! Next, the first body paragraph must stay on the topic of scheduling. What paragraph does the first sentence above belong in? Can you revise so this paragraph focuses on one point only?
*Thanh 5901461 has requested that you respond to the Use of Resources: Some of parenthetical elements do not follow the correct format. Let’s consider this citation from page 4:
Michael Emmer claims that “college athletes are ones who represent the college during their contracted four-year tenure” (Should College Athletes be Paid?)
MLA in-text citation requires the authors’ last names and page ( for print sources) in the citation. If no author is given, the article title punctuated with quotation marks may be used. Let’s review some examples:
The authors’ last