Emma Was Sad Analysis

I also need to use specific details for my whole essay. Specific details contain HOW, WHY, and the feelings of the writers. In the side quest problem, I gradually understood how to write a good quest with specific details. When wrote the side quest two and three, I wrote a story about my childhood. I needed to add more specific details. For my first draft, I wrote Emma was sad directly. I wrote, “Emma was sad”. You can see that this sentence narrates Emma directly, and it did not express how sad she was, and why she was sad. In order to express the feelings and add more details, I wrote that she cried every night and imagined the time that she spent with her parents. This sentence makes my readers feel my emotion, and the details suggest the reason of sadness. For the …show more content…
I revised by writing the hard work of Emma experienced. Also, I wrote the scar on the knee to make my audience feel the difficulties. We also needed more details when analyzing something. For the boss fight two, I did not beat the boss at first, I felt nervous about my writing. After reading to your comments, I knew that I needed to add more contexts from SGGK, and added the location of the quotes. I revised all of my quotes, and I did beat the boss finally. You can see the difference on my second draft and the final draft at the next few pages of my portfolio. My original thesis is that “Gawain is a rash man”, but I did not explain why Gawain is a rash man. Therefore, I changed into a different thesis statement, “Gawain is a rash man, Rash man do things not because of the logic but because of the feelings and emotions”. I also did not have enough and specific evidence from the Sir Gawain and the Green Knight. Therefore, I added more specific details and evidences from The Sir Gawain and The Gawain Knight. For the boss fight three, what is the best quest, my topic sentence was that expressing love to others is the best quest in