Draft 2 Revision Plan
My professor and my writing tutor commented that my conclusion is essentially a restatement of what I have already said in my literature review. It is important for a conclusion to contribute to the literature review in some way, so for my next draft, I plan to review the articles and extend my conclusion to include some other observation or where the field could be going. One observation I might include is that although the articles focus on time periods separated by almost five centuries, they describe the struggle of women for gender equality in the same way. Why is the current situation not significantly different from that of Elizabethan England?
Another comment I received from my professor was that my proposition is too narrow. The proposition in the second draft of my literature review deals with the three articles cited in the literature review rather than the field as a whole. This can be easily fixed in the next draft by adjusting the wording of the proposition to refer to the scholarship rather than the specific articles. This change will be increasingly necessary as more articles are included in the literature review. …show more content…
Two specific areas for improvement were mentioned. The first is a lack of analysis throughout the body paragraphs. In order to address this issue, I will go back these paragraphs and look to weak areas in explanations. The second area for improvement mentioned was my conclusion; one peer reviewer stated that my conclusion is more fitting for an argumentative essay than a literature review. I understand this, and I believe that the changes to my conclusion stated earlier in this revision plan will fix this
My professor and my writing tutor commented that my conclusion is essentially a restatement of what I have already said in my literature review. It is important for a conclusion to contribute to the literature review in some way, so for my next draft, I plan to review the articles and extend my conclusion to include some other observation or where the field could be going. One observation I might include is that although the articles focus on time periods separated by almost five centuries, they describe the struggle of women for gender equality in the same way. Why is the current situation not significantly different from that of Elizabethan England?
Another comment I received from my professor was that my proposition is too narrow. The proposition in the second draft of my literature review deals with the three articles cited in the literature review rather than the field as a whole. This can be easily fixed in the next draft by adjusting the wording of the proposition to refer to the scholarship rather than the specific articles. This change will be increasingly necessary as more articles are included in the literature review. …show more content…
Two specific areas for improvement were mentioned. The first is a lack of analysis throughout the body paragraphs. In order to address this issue, I will go back these paragraphs and look to weak areas in explanations. The second area for improvement mentioned was my conclusion; one peer reviewer stated that my conclusion is more fitting for an argumentative essay than a literature review. I understand this, and I believe that the changes to my conclusion stated earlier in this revision plan will fix this