Below I have revised Dr. Winston’s poorly written letter. In his original letter, Dr. Winston was very angry about his parking situation. The criticisms are understandable, but the letter was unprofessional and lashed out at his employer. His anger over the lack of parking at Texas A&M even made him threaten a lawsuit.
I made a lot of corrections to Dr. Winton’s original letter, it was very hard to read, was wordy, sounded pompous, and used excessive passive voice. Furthermore, I removed the unnecessary clichés and euphemisms and used a list to present his ideas. Also, I simplified and modified the sentences appropriately, while still keeping Dr. Winston’s message.
I made a lot of corrections to Dr. Winton’s original letter, it was very hard to read, was wordy, sounded pompous, and used excessive passive voice. Furthermore, I removed the unnecessary clichés and euphemisms and used a list to present his ideas. Also, I simplified and modified the sentences appropriately, while still keeping Dr. Winston’s message.