Commmunal Night

It was a cool starry night on the evening of December 9, 1958. The night gave a gentle breeze blowing through the trees on a moonlit hill. All lights are out [Make sure you stay with the same tense of speech. In the previous sentence you use the word “gave” which is past tense. ]in each building making a perfect night’s sleep at The Fountain Of The World. There was a peaceful setting throughout this Communal[Do you need this to be capitalized?] group. They are a group hoping to find peace with a life of service. Some of these members came to live in this group because they needed security; some looked to fulfill their dreams, and others were looking for hope. One man brought a group of individuals together to live as one, but then disaster.[Consider …show more content…
She briefly looks at the girls and the loudest noise she has ever heard explodes in her eardrums. Suddenly it felt like the ceiling was falling in and pieces of glass were everywhere, all she could think of was needing to get out. With so much falling around her she had an immediate feeling of helplessness and blindness. She felt stinging coming on her feet, smoke stinging her nostrils and her lungs feeling heavy. All she could see was a thick fog all around her. In her confused state, she felt glass cutting her feet. But like always [What do you mean “like always?” Something similar to this has happened before?]she would deal with this later. For now, the time was to get …show more content…
This hill aglow at two in the morning was not a good thing[Again, watch your verb tenses. Decide if you’re going to tell it in the past tense, or in the present. ]. The sisters did not always agree, but this time, there was complete agreement. They are all were certain the glow meant something of importance. They all calmly get dressed in the daily attire for the day, which takes less than five [Numbers 1-9 should always be written out. ]minutes. Wally, the seamstress, makes all their clothing. The sleeves are just above the elbows with a high neckline. The only decoration is a small cloth emblem with the letters WKFL in a circular setting. These emblems were the colors of bright gold and blue sewn in the middle of the chest area between the shoulders. Their bodice was form fitting. It met with a cloth belt at the waist. tied to the side to give a semblance of order. The skirt was "A" frame and landed between mid-calf and ankle to complete the neat look of what was called a robe. Women used the same cloth and color as their robe to cover their heads. The cloth headgears were a band that went around the head at the hairline with material attached to fall just past the shoulders down the back. No shoes, all went barefooted, and this completed the