Comment to Eryn Speer from Rachel Garrison
I enjoyed your paper overall, the different perspective of the storyteller made the story mysterious and exciting for the viewer. Up until the end I believed that the James we were speaking of was a creature and yet it was a human. Giving the audience a small glimse of what is in store for them during the story in the beginging and changing their expectations complately gives the storyteller the upperhand. Letting every detail of the story draw the viewer into what they believe is going to happen, then switching it around, keeping the reader insterested and questioning. Loved the detail in describing the surroundings and feelings of the characters.
Some of the things that I would change grammatically
I enjoyed your paper overall, the different perspective of the storyteller made the story mysterious and exciting for the viewer. Up until the end I believed that the James we were speaking of was a creature and yet it was a human. Giving the audience a small glimse of what is in store for them during the story in the beginging and changing their expectations complately gives the storyteller the upperhand. Letting every detail of the story draw the viewer into what they believe is going to happen, then switching it around, keeping the reader insterested and questioning. Loved the detail in describing the surroundings and feelings of the characters.
Some of the things that I would change grammatically