Child Beauty Document Analysis

Given that my MWA 2 was on the topic of child beauty pageants and their corruptive traits, I have decided to transform my commentary to that of an article that would be published in a parenting magazine. I did so because I wanted my audience to be primarily mothers and fathers, and anyone with a child that would read material that gave parental advice. Which also ties in with my purpose. Because my commentary had a argument that claimed child beauty pageants to be toxic to the youth, my purpose is to warn parents of the dangers that come with allowing children to participate in such a mature competition. Some may be unaware or conflicted on such controversial activities, so what better way than publish an article stating all of its flaws and …show more content…
Because it was supposed to an article that would be published in a magazine, I wanted it to look the part. As I scattered through many magazine articles, it was prominent that most had the same format. First I changed my header to catch the attention of the reader. I had changed the title for the sake of my audience, and made it bold with color. I also took one of my main points within the article and placed it in the header to act as a brief summary. All of which I have seen in many articles. Pictures were another addition that were not present in my original MWA. Although I did not add a ton in my revision, I put in two images to help with my argument and to entice the reader. I also took out my MLA citations because I did not want the paper to look like an academic essay. However, I kept my introductions to all quotes with the source and author. Besides making my revision fit my new rhetorical situation, I also fixed all mistakes that were pointed out from my commentary. All feedback and criticism given in my major writing assignment were either changed or omitted form my creative revision. I choose the rhetorical situation of a parenting magazine because I felt as if my original commentary would fit in nicely. Any article that revolves around children will more than likely strike the attention of parents, and since mine was about child activities, it was an even better fit. I also wanted to revise my original assignment to a magazine article because I wanted to play around with the format, adding pictures, and making it look authentic. I also must admit that when it comes to writing assignments, I am not that creative, so transforming a commentary to a magazine article would