I chose to write pages 19 to 23 of fortress (lord,1981), from the perspective of the character Toby. In Fortress (lord,1981) Toby is portrayed as a whiney, excitable but anxious five-year-old boy. Knowing that, being under the tree when the kidnappers arrived must have been terrifying from Toby's perspective, we know that he didn’t really speak while the kidnappers were there. The characters with him are janie, leanne, richard, jamie and sarah until shortly after the kidnappers arrive, this is when janie leaves to alert the teacher. In my rewrite of the scene janie leaving was initiated by leanne whispering “Janie, go tell miss”, I made leanne initiate janie telling the teacher because leanne is portrayed in Fortress (lord,1981) as having some
