Challenges And Weaknesses Of Darwin And Tolstoy By That Ben Hogan

This memo will discuss my challenges and strengths in essay 1. My points, quoted evidence, analysis are all good. For example, from quoted “Did you know that Darwin and Tolstoy were considered ordinary children? That Ben Hogan, one of the greatest golfers of all time, was completely uncoordinated and graceless as a child?" I wrote this is a vivid story based on three people's true histories… someone else's experience and successes are skills we can learn… That is what the author wants to convey through the writing move ethos.” In this paragraph, I understand clearly what the author mention and associate what I learned in order to express the best thoughts I have.
Next, in my third paragraph of essay 1, I led the conversation about writing move pathos base on main ideas. For instance, “she used pathos to strengthen her point… a sense of fear… to express emotions… the reader a similar feeling that it exists on a fixed mindset, this is pathos.” I really focused on the topic sentence and reiterated the key keywords. My purpose was to clarify a matter that I was of interest. …show more content…
For example, in the second paragraph on the logos topic, I have analyzed "This is meticulous and responsible research which aims to find out reliable answers. She helps someone who in the similar cases understands big impacts and negativity about people who have a fixed mindset. That is exactly logos. They make believe that we will become better every time we look at it if we know how to give up a fixed mindset replaced by a growth mindset that will be more useful.” It is still incoherent and I will definitely fix it for more