Buster Douglass Critique

Hi, Sid! I just wanted to thank you again for taking the time to critique my original ‘Buster’ Douglas story. It’s my sincere hope you did not find my reply in return to you too defensive. Though I may not have agreed with each sentiment you had to give when it came to my work, I was still able to derive many valuable ideas for improvement going forward, and feel as though your advice was instrumental to me producing my second take on dealing with the former world heavyweight champion while he indulged in a luxurious lifestyle after retiring from boxing. Please feel free to download it in my first discussion board posting for Module Ten. I wish and pray you will consider it an improvement over what I had turned in earlier. I’ve got to give you an applause round, not only for your time spent and honesty displayed in critiquing …show more content…
In recent times, I’ve learned methods in multitudes for cutting out filler, but sometimes it’s still not enough to eradicate the need for scanning my writing to see if, for instance, I’ve used ten or more words to describe something or someone where only five or less might suffice. There’s never a one-size-fits-each-situational-scenario, fail-safe method guaranteed to work each time, but my knowledge on fluff flambéing techniques is greater now than it’s ever been before. Your revamped and revised “Blue Bird” version is not available for public download, so I can’t compare it against the original, but I might have to suggest—from what I’m able to gather by reading the original—you make expansions to your revision process by accounting for overused words (just/then, was/were), passive verbs (I spotted seven), repeated sentence starts (I spotted eleven), long sentences (one was thirty-seven words long), and clichés outside dialogue (“foam at the