BIG FIRE presents as a character driven dramatic tale about freedom. The story focuses on the protagonist, Kuti, who is an African slave who teams up with an Indian Tribe.
The goal is clear and the stakes are life, death, and freedom. The tone is consistently dramatic. The era, culture, and time period authentically come to life.
There’s a lot to really like about this script. The characters are rich and complex. There’s no doubt that the character of Kuti drives the plot. He’s an easy character to like. He placed in a harrowing situation and the audience effortlessly roots for him.
There are many strong and memorable scenes, including the scene in which he is scarred on both arms and when he saves Little Trout. There are also many smart …show more content…
Consider moving up the escape with the Indians and Kuti joining the tribe earlier. It’s really his acceptance by the tribe that makes this story stand out. It’s the idea of Kuti and the Indian forming an alliance that excites the audience. The idea that he eventually becomes “Big Fire” is very smart. This comes at the midpoint and seems to seal their alliance.
Also, re-examine the goal for the script. Kuti repeatedly says that his goal is to save his wife and child. He verbalizes this on page 45 and then several times throughout the script he repeats his goal: on page 55 he says they are on a plantation and that he must go there (yet later he doesn’t seem to know where they are which feels inconsistent page 70). On page 87, Kuti again repeats his goal: “I will set out…” On page 102, he believes Ben can lead him to where his wife is.
Stories need to be goal driven. Instead, Kuti repeats the goal, but he never acts on the goal or feels proactive enough in coming up with a plan of action to achieve his goal. This makes the structure feels as if it has no real direction and this causes the pace to feel sluggish. Granted, the series of events that occur are well written, but the audience keeps waiting and anticipating Kuti to try to rescue his
The goal is clear and the stakes are life, death, and freedom. The tone is consistently dramatic. The era, culture, and time period authentically come to life.
There’s a lot to really like about this script. The characters are rich and complex. There’s no doubt that the character of Kuti drives the plot. He’s an easy character to like. He placed in a harrowing situation and the audience effortlessly roots for him.
There are many strong and memorable scenes, including the scene in which he is scarred on both arms and when he saves Little Trout. There are also many smart …show more content…
Consider moving up the escape with the Indians and Kuti joining the tribe earlier. It’s really his acceptance by the tribe that makes this story stand out. It’s the idea of Kuti and the Indian forming an alliance that excites the audience. The idea that he eventually becomes “Big Fire” is very smart. This comes at the midpoint and seems to seal their alliance.
Also, re-examine the goal for the script. Kuti repeatedly says that his goal is to save his wife and child. He verbalizes this on page 45 and then several times throughout the script he repeats his goal: on page 55 he says they are on a plantation and that he must go there (yet later he doesn’t seem to know where they are which feels inconsistent page 70). On page 87, Kuti again repeats his goal: “I will set out…” On page 102, he believes Ben can lead him to where his wife is.
Stories need to be goal driven. Instead, Kuti repeats the goal, but he never acts on the goal or feels proactive enough in coming up with a plan of action to achieve his goal. This makes the structure feels as if it has no real direction and this causes the pace to feel sluggish. Granted, the series of events that occur are well written, but the audience keeps waiting and anticipating Kuti to try to rescue his