Also, the writer had a lack of understanding of the elements of analysis and a lack of composition skills. The presented argument could have been easily improved upon if the writer took more time to find good supportive evidence within the provided documents. This may have helped the writer develop a strong and persuasive…
Thank you for letting me to be your peer to review your Final Essay, I will try my best to point out and making suggestion as far as my knowledge serves me. I will look over paragraph by paragraph, from page one to the last page of your essay. You have not put title for the essay and I have some difficulty to grasp the main idea.…
Hello Robin, it is a pleasure to read your essay. You address the prompt clearly in this essay. Furthermore, I found that the flow between the ideas is well-written. To improve this essay better, you may consider the following inputs: "For this, an ideal government.." "..the inter relation.." it should be interrelation "Quiet often Military come in play quite often when a relation.." "And a military interference is.." How if you replace the word "And" with other transition signals to make your essay more academic, for example: "furthermore, moreover, in addition.…
It was the first essay I ever wrote in college and it was on a topic I never hard of, rhetorical analysis. I when I was writing it, I kept getting frustrated because I didn’t feel like it was my best work. I did a lot of research on it and with the help of the writing center and my Professor, Dr. Osterhaus, I came to the conclusion that a rhetorical analysis was not as foreign as I though it was. The best improvement I made on my paper was based on the feedback I received at the writing center.…
Also the start of your thesis was a bit hard to understand but other than that it was good.…
He really stayed on topic with is argument. He shows focus and got his point across. His argument remained strong as well as his rhetoric. I would say that his essay was very persuasive. He gained my attention and discussed many things I agreed with.…
A friend of mine was approached at the Tucson Reptile Show, and told to "watch out for me, I am the grammar nazi." Right off the bat, let's clear this up. I love the title. Absolutely love it. When you whine and bitch that someone is a "Grammar Nazi" what you are actually saying, is "Watch out for that guy, he is smart." or "Watch out for that guy, he paid attention in school instead of fucking around in class."…
Out of all the feedback that I received from this paper, I think the most helpful would have been the part where I am asked why. Sometimes I forget to include why or how. These comments showed me what to do better on my next essay, and showed my how much I still need to…
1. What is the essay’s main claim? If you are not sure, describe what you think the essay is trying to persuade you of, and note that you do not see a main claim in the paper. How could the claim be made clearer, more focused, or more specific? The main claim of the essay is unnecessary repetitive testing costing the hospitals and patients more money and not good care.…
Do the English that is spoken at home while growing up have any effect on how well you performed in school or around your community? I grew up in Los Angeles, CA in a low-income area that was infested with a lot of gang activities, criminal activities, and drug related activities. Growing up in this type of environment I was accustomed to speaking improper English also know as slang. Talking and writing improper English was common for me in an everyday situation for example when communicating with friends even family members I would open up with what's up instead of answering with hello how are you doing. Throughout high school improper English would transition into my schoolwork, instead of writing I am, I would've wrote I is.…
Before beginning this course, I knew that I lacked confidence within my writing. People say that you are your own worst critique, and I fully agree with that statement. My writing was not terrible in some aspects, but I knew that it needed to be improved upon. I lacked the experience needed because writing was not something that I did on a daily basis. When I first started English 1302, the little confidence that I had significantly plummeted since my writing seemed childish compared to other students.…
Like almost any other person in the world, I am passionate about a cause; that cause is abortion (among other things). This essay that I wrote clearly explains why I hate abortion. I think this is one of the best persuasive essays that I have written so far. I actually did this essay earlier in the year, before my senior year, because I was so passionate about it. My favorite part of this essay would have to be my conclusion.…
After having read your essay I checked your proposal and your sources analyses in order to have an overall experience of what you would like to research and why. The purpose of your proposal is slightly different from the purpose of your first draft. In your proposal, you mentioned that you wanted to explore "how music and language coincide with one another [and] how music was and is used as a tool to communicate social issues and social changes. " You also wanted to “show how music has been used as a form of language in worship, was, education medical etc.”…
Ever since I had the task to redo a sentence with the “- WORD-,” I been trying to use it but I guess I’m not sure when to use it in my writing. The thing is I am not privileged when it comes to grammar. I actually like to write but I wasn’t good at it.…
Self reflection is the mental process that acquires knowledge and understanding through thoughts and experience which helps encourage self awareness. This essay focuses on assessing my objectives and how I have developed my skills from the beginning of this semester until now. At the start of semester A, I wasn’t confident in preparing for the skills sessions and workshops. I wasn 't always able to find the correct answers to the workshop questions set which made it relatively difficult for me to participate in lectures despite finding myself at the library every other day. I began by listening to knowledge based lectures online and making notes alongside the recommended reading given by my lecturers or the module guide.…