Argumentative Essay Tobacco

After rereading my past argumentative essay, I noticed key grammatical and structural errors that, if fixed, could assist me in the future. This argumentative essay lacked a strong thesis, reliable sources, and a sense of order of importance. The argument was to push the United States to make the silent killer, better known as tobacco, illegal. The essay reflected on key factors that were in favor of banning tobacco. After my grandmother died of lung cancer, I began to become an activist in the fight against tobacco use. I believe it should be illegal so that people will not be allowed to kill themselves and others with it anymore. The revision and adjustment of these errors will assist me not only this year, but in the following years to come. The most outstanding error to me, was the lack of a strong thesis. The thesis is a sentence or a …show more content…
An essay that has no sense of order may not receive as good of a grade as someone who does have good flow. If the reader can not tell what is going on in the essay then he or she may take points off of the grade. After revising my argumentative essay, I noticed that there was a sense of displacement. The ideas portrayed in the argumentative essay, had no sense of order of importance; therefore the essay lacked a clear thought process. This led readers astray from the main topic of each paragraph and essay in whole, resulting in a lower grade. A short amount of time and effort should be taken to make sure that each paragraph and essay flow smoothly and appropriately. This short amount of effort and time taken to make sure that the essay flows smoothly can result in a higher grade. After reviewing the essay, I realized that I need to slow down and make sure my essay and paragraphs have a good solid flow. This can be done while writing the essay or after writing the essay, this could result in a higher grade and clearer ideas pushed