Alaina Zappulla
Ms. Miles
Seventh Grade English
Essays: Area to Improve
1.
Do not use the word “thing” *Use stronger noun*
Done?_______
2.
Make sure all sentences support the thesis statement
Done?_______
3.
Make sure all quotes are relevant to the topic
Done?_______
4.
Do not use first person in the literary cirque
Done?_______
5.
Make sure your paragraph follow the books order of events
Done?_______
6.
Never write about your own feelings!!!!!
Done?_______
7.
Must include 2-3 quotes in every paragraph.
Done?_______
8.
Explain everything thoroughly!
Done?_______
9.
Minimize the amount of baby verbs used throughout the essay!!!!!
Done?_______
10.
Proof-read before you turn it in!!!!!!!!!
Done?_______
11.
Underline the title or italics
Done?_______
12.
Include Works Cited - FORMAT CORRECTLY
Done?_______
13.
Make sure all proper nouns are capitalized
Done?_______
14.
Stay in present tense
Done?_______
15.
Make sure you use the apostrophe in the right way
Done?_______
16.
Make sure character's names are spelled correctly
Done?_______
17.
Add transitional words
Done?_______
18.
Set the scene
Done?_______
19.
Double space entire essay
Done?_______
20.
Include theme and author’s name in title
Done?_______
21.
Write complete sentences
Done?_______
22.
No contractions
Done?_______
23.
Use commas correctly
Done?_______
24. Spacing- NEEDS TO BE CORRECT Done?_______ 25 Bottom margin in is 1’’ Done?_______ 26. Introduce all quotes Done?_______ 27. Do not place a period inside the quotation Done?_______ 28. Do not use slang Done?_______ 29. Start essay with a general statement Done?_______ 30. Format footnotes correctly Done?_______ 31. Essays need to be 3 full pages with a works cited page Done?_______ Alaina Zappulla Ms.Miles Seventh Grade English 28 April 2017 Do you support Animal Testing? Most people believe that testing on animals before using the consuming good on a human is a very great idea. I would beg to differ, animal testing is in fact wicked and barbaric. Although us human can not understand animals this does not mean that they do not have emotions leading to that they can still be put through a lot of pain. According to PETA.org, over 100 million animals die every year due to animal testing. This can be decreased majorly by using the methods that do not involve using animals and with those methods already created, using is a no brainer. Although, the consuming good may work on an animal this does not mean that it would not have a negative effect on a human. (Seventh Citaion) The thought of animals going through all this pain disgusts me. According to Independent.co, “We know that animals certainly feel physical pain…” (First Citation) Knowing that the animals go through all this pain, do you still support animal testing? Now, just imagine if you were the animal you would go through the same pain. Nevertheless if you were a human you would experience the same pain. An example, of what pain and torture animals experience in laboratories all over America, “After three dogs were forced to ingest a test substance every day for five days at Charles River Laboratories, they experienced labored breathing and a high heart rate. They became cold to the touch, were not able to be aroused and were seen with the test substance in their mouths and on their bodies. One dog died and the other two were euthanized one to two days later.” (Second Citation) Not only does one of the dog die from this, but throughout the five days the three dogs had to suffer and experience great pain just to test this substance. Hence, animals feel …show more content…
Animals experience the same pain level as humans. So with animal testing we are putting animals through a lot of pain. Nevertheless, with animal testing we are killing over 100 million animals every year. We are also killing over 22,000 cats every year, cats are also known as one of the most kindest animals. Even though people think that we are saving human lives by risking animals lives. This is not always the case, drugs they may work on animals may not always work on humans. In the end, animal testing is cruel and malicious and needs to be stopped, do you still think animal testing is a good
Ms. Miles
Seventh Grade English
Essays: Area to Improve
1.
Do not use the word “thing” *Use stronger noun*
Done?_______
2.
Make sure all sentences support the thesis statement
Done?_______
3.
Make sure all quotes are relevant to the topic
Done?_______
4.
Do not use first person in the literary cirque
Done?_______
5.
Make sure your paragraph follow the books order of events
Done?_______
6.
Never write about your own feelings!!!!!
Done?_______
7.
Must include 2-3 quotes in every paragraph.
Done?_______
8.
Explain everything thoroughly!
Done?_______
9.
Minimize the amount of baby verbs used throughout the essay!!!!!
Done?_______
10.
Proof-read before you turn it in!!!!!!!!!
Done?_______
11.
Underline the title or italics
Done?_______
12.
Include Works Cited - FORMAT CORRECTLY
Done?_______
13.
Make sure all proper nouns are capitalized
Done?_______
14.
Stay in present tense
Done?_______
15.
Make sure you use the apostrophe in the right way
Done?_______
16.
Make sure character's names are spelled correctly
Done?_______
17.
Add transitional words
Done?_______
18.
Set the scene
Done?_______
19.
Double space entire essay
Done?_______
20.
Include theme and author’s name in title
Done?_______
21.
Write complete sentences
Done?_______
22.
No contractions
Done?_______
23.
Use commas correctly
Done?_______
24. Spacing- NEEDS TO BE CORRECT Done?_______ 25 Bottom margin in is 1’’ Done?_______ 26. Introduce all quotes Done?_______ 27. Do not place a period inside the quotation Done?_______ 28. Do not use slang Done?_______ 29. Start essay with a general statement Done?_______ 30. Format footnotes correctly Done?_______ 31. Essays need to be 3 full pages with a works cited page Done?_______ Alaina Zappulla Ms.Miles Seventh Grade English 28 April 2017 Do you support Animal Testing? Most people believe that testing on animals before using the consuming good on a human is a very great idea. I would beg to differ, animal testing is in fact wicked and barbaric. Although us human can not understand animals this does not mean that they do not have emotions leading to that they can still be put through a lot of pain. According to PETA.org, over 100 million animals die every year due to animal testing. This can be decreased majorly by using the methods that do not involve using animals and with those methods already created, using is a no brainer. Although, the consuming good may work on an animal this does not mean that it would not have a negative effect on a human. (Seventh Citaion) The thought of animals going through all this pain disgusts me. According to Independent.co, “We know that animals certainly feel physical pain…” (First Citation) Knowing that the animals go through all this pain, do you still support animal testing? Now, just imagine if you were the animal you would go through the same pain. Nevertheless if you were a human you would experience the same pain. An example, of what pain and torture animals experience in laboratories all over America, “After three dogs were forced to ingest a test substance every day for five days at Charles River Laboratories, they experienced labored breathing and a high heart rate. They became cold to the touch, were not able to be aroused and were seen with the test substance in their mouths and on their bodies. One dog died and the other two were euthanized one to two days later.” (Second Citation) Not only does one of the dog die from this, but throughout the five days the three dogs had to suffer and experience great pain just to test this substance. Hence, animals feel …show more content…
Animals experience the same pain level as humans. So with animal testing we are putting animals through a lot of pain. Nevertheless, with animal testing we are killing over 100 million animals every year. We are also killing over 22,000 cats every year, cats are also known as one of the most kindest animals. Even though people think that we are saving human lives by risking animals lives. This is not always the case, drugs they may work on animals may not always work on humans. In the end, animal testing is cruel and malicious and needs to be stopped, do you still think animal testing is a good