Maricruz’s essay suffers from clarity, and some grammatical error. First, in the third paragraph Maricruz states, “Many suggest that it has awaken a giant” That sentence was confusing, she should probably delete sentence. Second, in the fourth paragraph Maricruz states that “Because for many teens, this is the time when their hormones are going crazy and they are more vulnerable to finding an escape to things like social media to help them.” Sentence is not clear, and she starts with because I would eliminate sentence or change verbage. In the last sentence of Maricruz conclusion it is not clear, instead she can say “turn off all electronic cell phones and social media at certain time.”
