Analysis Of ' A Simple Life ' Essay

1078 Words Dec 3rd, 2016 5 Pages
1. Lines from this portion of my story work such as, “Terry sat upon the porcelain god, reading a Science Daily magazine” and “Then in an unseen instant – the roof popped and cracked in a blaze of glory as everything went up into a cloud of sizzling smolder.” – These lines work because they focus in on the comedic tone that I was looking to convey through the story and they show rather than tell. I think that more lines like this could make the story feel more natural.
2. In this portion of the story, I feel as if a lot of details are delivered that paint an image of who Terry is, however, nothing is focused on long enough to give the reader a complete image of who the character really is. I think that the topic of, “a simple life” can be expounded upon by giving these vivid descriptions, but then taking the time to actually focus on one of them such as the hedge fund, the tiger tattoo, or his fast-food diet, as a way to deliver a fuller version of the character.
3. Lizzie and Mary’s comments about this portion of the story specifically stood out to me. I think that explaining why I picked Esperanto, as the language that Terry and the father argue in should be explained. Maybe I could switch it up with Spanish like Mary suggested, seeing as it lines up better with the closing scene of the narrator drinking horchata. And I agree with Lizzie’s comments about focusing on crafting more dialogue to flesh out the characters and deliver a more fluid image of what is taking place,…

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