I want to say that this paper can be great once you develop your arguments more. In terms of the introduction, I like the quote you included. It really gives the reader a perspective on what you are trying to say. An issue is that some of your sentences are too long and that will most likely detract the viewers’ attention from any points you are trying to make. I recommend making your sentences clearer and less lengthy, because the introduction is what gets the reader interested in your paper.
The paper’s main thesis consists of two sentences. Your argument is that your family corresponds with many of the course concepts, but the issue is that you do not summarize how it fits. Also, you discuss that your family does not measure up to the traditional
The paper’s main thesis consists of two sentences. Your argument is that your family corresponds with many of the course concepts, but the issue is that you do not summarize how it fits. Also, you discuss that your family does not measure up to the traditional