1. Which Introduction Is More Effective?

Which introduction is more effective? Explain your answer. Point out the strengths and weaknesses of each introduction.

After closely examining both introductions, I would say that introduction 2 would be the most effective in this case. Based on the title of the essay I would assume that the written piece would be directed at the public. This topic on the importance of teaching children how to swim would interest parents, grandparents, teachers and community leaders that are concerned with children’s water safety skills. With this in mind, the introduction 2 draws the reader into a traumatic and possible tragic example of what can occur if a child cannot swim, underlining the importance of teaching children how to swim. Furthermore, the writer taps into the fear of every parent when it comes to water safety, drawing the reader into and enticing him to read and explore what the writer has to say about the subject (Hill,2001). However, this introduction lacks a clear and concise thesis statement that indicates to the reader what the writer will discuss within the essay. In this case, it is unclear if the importance of teaching children swimming skills will be the topic or, …show more content…
The writer provides the reader with interesting facts and additionally poses a problem followed by the writer’s solutions to the problem (Hacker & Sommers, 2014, p. 41). As the writer concludes the introduction, he mentions that he is a swimming instructor thus underlining his understanding and knowledge of the subject to the reader. However, this introduction does not provide the reader with an emotionally charged, highly effective example that firstly, highlights the importance of teaching swimming to children and, secondly, draws the reader in and attracts him to continue reading and exploring what the writer has to say about the