Every student has at least written an essay, go over the content once, and submits the paper hoping that they get a decent grade. This is a habit that I tend to do on my essays, but have been trying to surpass since the beginning of the semester. With my writing skills progressing in this course, so has my editing and revising skills. As I reread my first and second final drafts of this semester, I have been able to identify the errors in my writing and make significant changes to improve my essays.
When I was revising and editing my first final draft, significant changes were being made throughout the entire essay. I mostly edited grammatical errors, fixed my quotations when citing my sources, and changed some vocabulary to give off a more formal approach to the essay. The revisions I made were mostly trying to establish an …show more content…
I edited the same amount of grammatical errors, proper quotations when citing my sources, and added a more sophisticated vocabulary. However, the revisions I made were slightly different compared to final draft essay two. One of the significant revisions I made was the introduction sentence on my second paragraph. I saw this introduction as too broad and too simple. I revised the sentence, “[i]n the media today, advertisement and schemes with titles like “Lose 20 Pounds in 2 Weeks” and “How to Lose 10 Pounds in 3 Days” are not the healthiest ways in losing body fat" and experimented a new hook by giving the audience a vivid and perhaps unexpected anecdote. I gave the audience a common scenario that they see themselves actually sitting in their living room eating and watching television. Then I made an easy transition by placing my original personal experience after the ironic outcome based off from the argument in the paragraph, "[f]or many people, they knew that these types of commercials are fake however I did
When I was revising and editing my first final draft, significant changes were being made throughout the entire essay. I mostly edited grammatical errors, fixed my quotations when citing my sources, and changed some vocabulary to give off a more formal approach to the essay. The revisions I made were mostly trying to establish an …show more content…
I edited the same amount of grammatical errors, proper quotations when citing my sources, and added a more sophisticated vocabulary. However, the revisions I made were slightly different compared to final draft essay two. One of the significant revisions I made was the introduction sentence on my second paragraph. I saw this introduction as too broad and too simple. I revised the sentence, “[i]n the media today, advertisement and schemes with titles like “Lose 20 Pounds in 2 Weeks” and “How to Lose 10 Pounds in 3 Days” are not the healthiest ways in losing body fat" and experimented a new hook by giving the audience a vivid and perhaps unexpected anecdote. I gave the audience a common scenario that they see themselves actually sitting in their living room eating and watching television. Then I made an easy transition by placing my original personal experience after the ironic outcome based off from the argument in the paragraph, "[f]or many people, they knew that these types of commercials are fake however I did