Mood In my story 7-Eleven Burrito, I created a peaceful mood in the beginning and end of my short story using descriptive language. When Peter entered the 7-eleven shop, “Sunlight filtered through the wide shop windows, the warm cocoa odor of the coffee machine wafted through the air, and the low humming of the hot dog machine snored in the background.”(1). The use “sunlight”, “warm”, and “snore” create an idyllic atmosphere as they convey a feeling similar to waking up early in the morning to the songs of birds and warm sunlight on your face. This is because the word sunlight has a positive connotation, it makes the reader feel light inside due to its importance in our lives. The word “warm” also has a positive connotation. “Warm” gives
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In particular, I broke up sentences with sound effects to build anticipation on what’s about to happen. An example of this would be when Peter Wakefield (The Protagonist) was making a burrito got a phone call: “Unknown Caller. Ring. Sweat drowned his neck. Ring. Staring down, his stomach instantly hollowed out. The whisper of a voice was being put on trial. Ring. The Gavel came slamming down, reverberating throughout the courthouse. Ring. Guilty. Silence. Peter looked as if he was playing nightwatchman, and he was one of the statues.”(4). This situation involves the protagonist being put in a choke-hold situation. Each event in between the rings is described to negative. along with the rings emphasizing the short amount of time it took to for the protagonist to go in a downward spiral, it creates tension by endangering the protagonist. Another example is when Peter goes on a walk, he starts seeing pictures and making assumptions about his biological dad while his heart pounds like crazy. “Thump. A picture of a man stalking the family he had left for dead. Thump. A picture of a man who wants to torture his family like satan. Thump. A picture of a flaky, ruthless, loveless man who was going to invade and incinerate the happiness that they had worked so hard to cultivate. Rip.” (6). This creates tension as the negative assumptions keep escalating, putting the reader through a staircase of conflict, where eventually everything falls. Afterwards, he “venomously” typed a text describing “...every last story he had, every single experience that could've been avoided. Every time he had felt abandoned”(6). Like the previous two, it repeated phrases to keep on escalating a negative idea. In escalating the situation, it creates tension as it builds anticipation for the reader. I also created tension using foreshadowing and pitting the protagonist values
In particular, I broke up sentences with sound effects to build anticipation on what’s about to happen. An example of this would be when Peter Wakefield (The Protagonist) was making a burrito got a phone call: “Unknown Caller. Ring. Sweat drowned his neck. Ring. Staring down, his stomach instantly hollowed out. The whisper of a voice was being put on trial. Ring. The Gavel came slamming down, reverberating throughout the courthouse. Ring. Guilty. Silence. Peter looked as if he was playing nightwatchman, and he was one of the statues.”(4). This situation involves the protagonist being put in a choke-hold situation. Each event in between the rings is described to negative. along with the rings emphasizing the short amount of time it took to for the protagonist to go in a downward spiral, it creates tension by endangering the protagonist. Another example is when Peter goes on a walk, he starts seeing pictures and making assumptions about his biological dad while his heart pounds like crazy. “Thump. A picture of a man stalking the family he had left for dead. Thump. A picture of a man who wants to torture his family like satan. Thump. A picture of a flaky, ruthless, loveless man who was going to invade and incinerate the happiness that they had worked so hard to cultivate. Rip.” (6). This creates tension as the negative assumptions keep escalating, putting the reader through a staircase of conflict, where eventually everything falls. Afterwards, he “venomously” typed a text describing “...every last story he had, every single experience that could've been avoided. Every time he had felt abandoned”(6). Like the previous two, it repeated phrases to keep on escalating a negative idea. In escalating the situation, it creates tension as it builds anticipation for the reader. I also created tension using foreshadowing and pitting the protagonist values