Nitish Baskar's Expository Essay Analysis

As a 7th grader at Fowler Middle School’s state of the art Gifted and Talented program, Nitish Baskar has recently written an analytical CBAP over a revolutionary invention. After a couple of weeks, he revisited this CBAP along with his classmates and looked to find improvements that will help them with the writing STAAR. To enhance their understanding of expository passages, they were assigned writing stations which focused on ideas, organization, development of ideas, word choice/conventions, and sentence fluency. After thorough realization and days of working, Nitish Baskar’s understanding of expository essays expanded and he realized that focusing on one controlling idea, adding more sentence variations, and developing commentary to back up evidence is crucial to sounding more professional and responding to the prompt strongly. On the very first day of stations, Nitish worked on the ideas section. He noticed positivity in his own writing such as that he thoroughly understood and responded to the prompt accordingly. Nitish then interviewed a fellow classmate and noticed how their concepts/evidence all revolved around one controlling idea. He also realized that his writing had often sidetracked from his main points and made unnecessary claims. For example, he stated, “The telephone …show more content…
In this station Nitish noticed that his pieces of evidence were pretty strong but noticed that his commentary was very weak and lacking. Throughout his body paragraph he had evidence such as how and when Alexander Graham Bell created the telephone and how it has developed over the few centuries rapidly. Even though he had decent evidence, his commentary was very lacking and seemed very abrupt. The commentary took away from the entire essay and seemed very rushed. Through this station, Nitish was able to understand the importance of having evidence and backing it up with strong and a relevant