The first assignment, a profile of a restaurant, demonstrates my how I have grown as a writer. This was the first essay I have written since my first quarter starting at UC Davis, so starting this essay, I already knew it would be a challenge to revamp my writing skills. This essay especially challenged me because it was a descriptive essay, and I have always struggled with being descriptive and creative. This was also the essay I chose to revise at the end of the quarter, which allows me to employ what I have learned into an old piece of writing. I titled this essay “A Bite of Relief” after visiting my father’s old restaurant at a chance of receiving closure about a situation that has always challenged my emotions. I had the opportunity to
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In my essay evaluation, I found that my biggest errors were in grammar and syntax, which led to distracting and confusing my audience. As I began revising my essay, it was clear to me how big of a part grammar and syntax has on the overall understanding of my piece. In my first submitted essay, my sentences read “Tarek comes with a plate, steaming with a cloud of smoke lingering as Tarek walks to my table. Full of life and color, yet simple.” In these two sentences, I meant to describe how Tarek was bringing a plate that was full of life and color, yet simple, to my table. However, the way I wrote these sentences led to confusion between if I was describing the plate of food or Tarek, the waiter. When I revised the essay, I improved these two sentences to better demonstrate what I meant, by saying “Tarek comes with a plate, steaming with a cloud of smoke as he walks to my table. The plate is full of life and color, yet simple.” By taking another objective look at my writing, I was able to see why these two sentences were previously confusing. The grammar in the second sentence ultimately led to the confusion since it was a fragment and didn’t point to a specific subject. As a writer, I have grown to understand the importance of grammar and syntax, which I didn’t take very seriously previously. I learned to take an objective look and read through my essay as if I was not …show more content…
I was, however, curious to see who the new owner is and how the restaurant looks today. I was curious to know if the restaurant is still successful and if any of Baba’s impression lasted.
My curiosity led to me to visit Café Morocco for the first time in fifteen years. As I approached the restaurant, I saw “Café Morocco Mediterranean Cuisine” plastered on the wall.” This revision allowed me to transition my ideas from a time where I didn’t want to visit my father’s restaurant, and how my curiosity led me to overcome this feeling. By doing this, I have grown in transitioning my thoughts in a way that is clear to my reader. However, this is still something that I struggle with and will need to improve as a further grow as a writer.
As I have grown as a writer throughout this course, I find writing essays to be less of a challenge and frightening thing, as I had always felt before taking this class. Throughout this course, I really focused on taking all of the criticism I received from my peers and professor seriously and centered my goals around growing as a writer. I now understand how important it to reread my pieces of writing, multiple times, in order to ensure that what I mean to say is actually what I am saying. I need to make my thought process clearer for my audience to follow along and understand the deeper meaning of my piece. My piece, “A Bite of Relief” has given me the
In my essay evaluation, I found that my biggest errors were in grammar and syntax, which led to distracting and confusing my audience. As I began revising my essay, it was clear to me how big of a part grammar and syntax has on the overall understanding of my piece. In my first submitted essay, my sentences read “Tarek comes with a plate, steaming with a cloud of smoke lingering as Tarek walks to my table. Full of life and color, yet simple.” In these two sentences, I meant to describe how Tarek was bringing a plate that was full of life and color, yet simple, to my table. However, the way I wrote these sentences led to confusion between if I was describing the plate of food or Tarek, the waiter. When I revised the essay, I improved these two sentences to better demonstrate what I meant, by saying “Tarek comes with a plate, steaming with a cloud of smoke as he walks to my table. The plate is full of life and color, yet simple.” By taking another objective look at my writing, I was able to see why these two sentences were previously confusing. The grammar in the second sentence ultimately led to the confusion since it was a fragment and didn’t point to a specific subject. As a writer, I have grown to understand the importance of grammar and syntax, which I didn’t take very seriously previously. I learned to take an objective look and read through my essay as if I was not …show more content…
I was, however, curious to see who the new owner is and how the restaurant looks today. I was curious to know if the restaurant is still successful and if any of Baba’s impression lasted.
My curiosity led to me to visit Café Morocco for the first time in fifteen years. As I approached the restaurant, I saw “Café Morocco Mediterranean Cuisine” plastered on the wall.” This revision allowed me to transition my ideas from a time where I didn’t want to visit my father’s restaurant, and how my curiosity led me to overcome this feeling. By doing this, I have grown in transitioning my thoughts in a way that is clear to my reader. However, this is still something that I struggle with and will need to improve as a further grow as a writer.
As I have grown as a writer throughout this course, I find writing essays to be less of a challenge and frightening thing, as I had always felt before taking this class. Throughout this course, I really focused on taking all of the criticism I received from my peers and professor seriously and centered my goals around growing as a writer. I now understand how important it to reread my pieces of writing, multiple times, in order to ensure that what I mean to say is actually what I am saying. I need to make my thought process clearer for my audience to follow along and understand the deeper meaning of my piece. My piece, “A Bite of Relief” has given me the