My portfolio consists of three different types of essays, an Argument Description, an Argument Analysis, and two Revision essays. For the argument description essay, I used “The Sexism of School Dress Codes” by Li Zhou to describe the negative effects dress codes have had on female and transgender students. And for the Argument Analysis and one of the Revision essays, I used Kanye West’s music video “Through the Wire” to analyze the importance of him producing his music video. With the different essays I wrote in my English course, I learned that revision was necessary to have a well written essay.
Before taking English 1310, I strongly believed that revising an essay was optional. But as I was asked multiple times to revise my writing assessment one, I realized that revision was more than just an option. Revision was necessary to have …show more content…
For example, in the last paragraph from my essay I had to remove the sentence that said, “Schools should also listen to the student when a problem does occur because some of the policies that are created, are offensive to some students.” And I had to rewrite “According to students and administrators, schools should involve students early on, when creating policies so that the students may be involved in the decision making process so that when the rule is established, students will respect the decision.” I had to rewrite that sentence mainly because it was too long to be a single sentence.
For my writing assessment two I had to create an Argument Analysis. The analysis that I had originally submitted had a lot of repetition. Most of the repetition was in the second paragraph because I was only quoting and repeating what I had already stated in the first sentence. As well as in my writing assessment one I had sentences in my assessment number two that were too wordy. therefore I had to rewrite
Before taking English 1310, I strongly believed that revising an essay was optional. But as I was asked multiple times to revise my writing assessment one, I realized that revision was more than just an option. Revision was necessary to have …show more content…
For example, in the last paragraph from my essay I had to remove the sentence that said, “Schools should also listen to the student when a problem does occur because some of the policies that are created, are offensive to some students.” And I had to rewrite “According to students and administrators, schools should involve students early on, when creating policies so that the students may be involved in the decision making process so that when the rule is established, students will respect the decision.” I had to rewrite that sentence mainly because it was too long to be a single sentence.
For my writing assessment two I had to create an Argument Analysis. The analysis that I had originally submitted had a lot of repetition. Most of the repetition was in the second paragraph because I was only quoting and repeating what I had already stated in the first sentence. As well as in my writing assessment one I had sentences in my assessment number two that were too wordy. therefore I had to rewrite