Argumentative Analysis Of Drafty Drea

First semester college freshman at the University of Arizona, Drafty Drea is an amateur writer with the “I still think this is high school English” mentality written all over her. From the cliché five paragraph essay to the inability to differentiate between “your” and “you’re” or “then” and “than”, Drafty Drea is fresh out of high school English and her lack of efficient writing styles and techniques interpret that very well. Drafty Drea knows that this first semester of college English is going to be a rude awakening for her.
As the first couple of weeks of college trudge along, Drafty Drea sits in her class as her English teacher, Professor Camp, goes over the requirements for the classes first writing assignment. The time has come for …show more content…
“Firstly Drafty Drea, you need to work on improving your thesis statement.” says Articulate Andrea, “Your thesis needs to be in the form of an argument and it needs to be explanatory and interpretive.” The two go over the papers thesis several times and they soon come up with a new and improved argumentative thesis. After reviewing the thesis statement, Drafty Drea has a better understanding of the strategies that comes with writing an effective thesis statement. The two move on to discuss the lack of higher level vocabulary that is not incorporated into Drafty Drea’s essay. “In order to articulate yourself with a higher esteem, you need to include college level vocabulary that is complex yet understandable.” says Articulate Andrea, “Using words like “good” “bad” or “nice” are poor in word choice and they are not expressive enough to execute a description of something.” says Articulate Andrea. Drafty Drea then uses a thesaurus to replace inadequate words that are higher level in vocabulary. “Although, a teacher can tell when a student is using vocabulary that is out of their comfort zone. Try not to use words that you yourself do not even understand. ” says Articulate Andrea. The revision process is going well for these two and it is clear that Drafty Drea is soaking in all of the feedback given to her about improving her writing. Next, Articulate Andrea explains the sandwich rule for integrating quotes into an essay. “The sandwich rule is a great technique to use when integrating quotes into your essays.” says Articulate Andrea. “What’s the sandwich rule?” asks Drafty Drea. “Incorporating quotes into an essay can be tricky. Not including enough information can lead to the quote being left hanging around with no relevance to the essay. The quote is there to help explain a claim. ” says Articulate Andrea, “The proper way to add a quote into an essay is to first introduce information